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Old 11-11-2008, 12:43 PM
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Very nice. Well written, with very descriptive words.
The only thing that I would fix is that you use the word engulf twice in a short amount of time. When you say "Sadness engulfed him" try and find a different word for engulf.
Keep it up.

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