For Aly, forever. (Poem)

[Stephen]

Alright well, Some of you may know, most don't. I am currently with the most amazing girl ever, Aly. She truly makes me unbelievably happy. Over the past week or so, I've wrote some poems for her, I've given her one, but I would like you guys to rate these, tell me how I can improve my flow of words, etc.

Poem 1. Distanced Heart

We may be states away
It seems a little far
But for you, anyday
I'd drive a million miles in my car

And on that day we meet
You and I, face to face
I know i'll feel the heat
That memory never to erase

No matter what they say
Even if it's true
I'd make that trip everyday
Just to be with you

You know i'll always be there
I hope you can see
Forever will I care
My hearts been set free.


Poem 2. The way I see her

A simple girl
A shining pearl
A face without shame
A heart not tame

A love so distant
A heart so persistent
A mind so strong
An answer never wrong

A future together
A life forever
A shoulder to cry on
A love to rely on

That's what I see
When I look straight at you
My heart for you is free
This I swear is true


Promise to never leave me
Because even though you're far
I think about you constantly
No matter where you are

And I would walk
Much more than a mile
Just promise one thing
Always keep your smile


Poem 3. Untitled
I have seen brighter days,
And I have seen darker too,
But the real sun never shined,
Until the day I met you

All I need now, is your love
To live my day, survive my night
I need you, more than words can tell
For without you, I see heaven as hell

My love, this I challenge you
To love me, just like I do
Because I needed you then, need you still
Let me reach your life, your heart I will fulfill



Three very different styled poems. I write each poem different, I know I don't always follow the rhyme sceams, but at least it's from my heart. Please criticize (constructively) so that I can get better.